“As you know, Bob…”

Hello, peeps! Hope everyone had a good T-Day. And Happy Hanukkah to those who celebrate it! I know some of you participated in NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month–November) and to those of you who hit that 50K-words, congrats! To those of you who didn’t, that’s cool, too. Because you participated and you did it, and you now (hopefully) have the start to your novel. So keep on keepin’ on!

And speaking of writing, let’s talk about an aspect of “show, don’t tell” that you might not have heard referred to in this way: “As you know, Bob…”

Bob? Bob who? Read on to find out…

I bring this up because I’m reading a novel (fantasy) published by Tor, a mainstream SF/F publishing house. I like the characters, the dialogue is snappy, the story is quirky, and there’s some nice humor in it. But this novel is driving me crazy. Why? Because every other paragraph, it seems, the main character stops to explain something to the reader. The book is written in the first person (link below if you don’t know what that is), so the MC is basically addressing the reader, lecturing him or her on background info that completely throws a reader off-track. Here’s a made-up example to give you a sense of what I’m talking about:

I picked up the tankard and took a sip and hoped the shadows in this part of the room hid my features. The last thing I needed was the Royal Guard knowing I was back in Regis. The Royal Guard under King Jer had become even more sadistic than the previous monarch’s reign. Jer was known for being a little crazy, and his Royal Guard reflected it. Too bad Neldip, the previous king, had died in battle. Jer wrested control of the kingdom and now everyone had to pay.

I set my tankard down and glanced at the next table. A scrawny Rindiglian was gnawing on a large bone. The kingdom of Rindiglia had fallen prey to hordes of goblins who swept down from the neighboring mountains in the upheavals following Neldip’s death. Many Rindiglians were thus displaced, and ended up in cities like Regis looking for work.


Can you see what the issue is here? We’ve taken side trips into things that don’t really have relevance to the story. This type of AYKB appears in sci fi and fantasy more than other genres, probably because the writer wants the reader to know the rich and varied history of the world he or she made up. The problem is, it interrupts the story. There are ways to introduce this kind of info that don’t interrupt pacing and flow. We don’t want to hear the history and culture of the area. Why? Because the MC is obviously trying to hide from the Royal Guard. We’d like to know why, and we’d like to know who the MC is. Detailed side trips into the history of the Royal Guard and the ethnic background of neighboring diners doesn’t tell us anything about that and instead we’re bogged down in details that don’t matter.

The book I’m reading now is full of details about royal dynasties, conspiracies, wars between siblings in royal families, specific information about the types of spells certain types of magic practitioners use…all at the expense of the pacing of the story. In action scenes, the author will describe, say, an attack by non-human soldiers and then the author will explain what ruler these soldiers serve and why they might be attacking. Tip: when you’re under attack, your first order of business is to get away from the attackers. Not to tell the reader what the attackers’ background is.

So basically, I think of “As you know, Bob…” as a tongue-in-cheek reference to an info-dump. In most cases, the AYKB is evident when one of your characters suddenly busts into a lecture in order to convey information. Usually the character is lecturing another character, but in some instances, I would argue that the character lectures the reader, especially if the story or book is written in first person POV (from the “I” POV). We see that above, when the author lectures the reader. How does the AYKB look in dialogue? Kind of like this:

“Jim, we’ve been stuck in this elevator for over three hours and no one’s responded to our cries for help or to the firefighter alert. [As you know], everyone in the building left long ago because both of us were working late and the cleaning crew is long gone. I hate to tell you this, but I really have to pee.”

“Well, Roger, I suppose we can open the doors just wide enough for you to do that. But [as you know], we’ve tried that and those doors are heavy. In fact, we tried three times, if you remember.”

The “as you know, Bob” moment is thus supposed to serve as an info vehicle. But what it ends up doing is interrupting the pacing of a story, and it ends up creating road bumps in a reader’s experience of the story. The Science Fiction Writers of America have this to say about “As you know, Bob…”

“A pernicious form of info-dump through dialogue, in which characters tell each other things they already know, for the sake of getting the reader up-to-speed. This very common technique is also known as “Rod and Don dialogue” (attr. Damon Knight) or “maid and butler dialogue” (attr Algis Budrys).”

So it’s info-dump, telling and not showing, and it interrupts your pacing. So let’s de-AYKB our two examples to see how that works:

I picked up the tankard and took a sip and hoped the shadows in this part of the room hid my features. The last thing I needed was the Royal Guard knowing I was back in Regis. Those sadistic bastards would carve me up good. All they needed was King Jer’s permission and if the rumors about him were true, he’d not only give it, he’d join in.

I set my tankard down and glanced at the next table. A scrawny Rindiglian was gnawing on a large bone. He looked a little rough, probably from escaping the goblins that overran Rindiglia last fall. Well, we’ve all got hard times to get through. I just hoped I lived through mine.

Do you see the difference? How that passage leads you to the same conclusions as the AYKB passage, but with fewer words, and without the lecture? There’s enough information for a reader to fill in the blanks, and the mood that’s evoked is kind of tense and brittle. The focus stays on the MC trying to avoid the Royal Guard–the MC is surveying his/her surroundings, checking it out, providing just enough info for the reader to evoke setting and mood, but keeping a sense of anxiety up front. So how about our guys in the elevator?

Roger fiddled with the buttons on his shirt again. He licked his lips nervously and looked at Jim. “It’s been three hours. I hate elevators anyway. But I’ve been in this one for three freakin’ hours.”

“Don’t think I don’t know it, man. I’m sick of yelling and my throat hurts, anyway. Go ahead and try the rescue button again. But if nobody’s responded by now, I doubt they will ’til morning.” He shrugged. “Hell, the cleaning crew’s probably long gone by now.”

“I have to pee, man.”

Jim sighed. “Fine. Let’s try the doors again. Maybe this time we’ll get ’em open a crack.”

Roger nodded, though he knew it might be futile. They’d tried three times already.

It required more words, but the characters convey to a reader that they’re stuck in an elevator without resorting to a lecture about it. The reader still knows these guys are stuck in an elevator, they’ve been there a while, they’re going to continue being stuck, and Roger has to pee. But we used a mixture of dialogue and action tags to convey that, allowing a more flexible narrative and a smoother flow.

Whew. So there you go. Bob isn’t necessarily a writer’s best friend, so it’s okay to give the guy a beer and send him on his way.

Happy writing, happy weekend, and peace out!


  1. Well, as you know, readers…


    Couldn’t resist. I did finally manage to finish that book. I’m tempted to see what the second in the series is all about, but I dread it because if it’s like the first, then I’ll be hanging out with Bob throughout.

    Anyway, hope everyone’s having a grand weekend!


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